The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of junk food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000

The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of junk food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000
The line graph below demonstrates
difference
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the difference
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of
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in
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junk food
consumption
by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. Units are measured in
a
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the
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number of
times
eaten per
year
.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that in the
last
decades,
consumption
of hamburgers was
rised
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raised
risen
significantly
while
fish
and
chips's
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chips
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consumption
was fall. In the beginning,
consumption
of
fish
and
chips
was the highest which is 100
times
per
year
.
Otherwise
,
consumption
of hamburgers and pizza was lower and started
on
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the range between 5-10
times
per
year
. Around 1985, pizza showed its dominance by taking over the number of
times
eaten per
year
from
fish
and
chips
and
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strong on around 95 meals per
year
.
However
,
fish
and
chips
only
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are only
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65
times
eaten
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apply
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per
year
.
In contrast
, pizza
consumption
was
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remained steady from 1995 to 2000 which is 85
times
eaten per
year
. Hamburgers
increase
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increased
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significantly
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into
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100
times
eaten per
year
in 2000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, times, year, fish, chips with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Spike
  • Dip
  • Steady growth
  • Decline
  • Plateau
  • Consumption patterns
  • Fast food
  • Processed snacks
  • Health consciousness
  • Marketing influence
  • Demographic factors
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Nutritional education
  • Epidemiological impact
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