The position of women in society has changed markedly in the last 20 years. Many of the problems young people now experience, such as juvenile delinquency, arise from the fact that many married women now work and are not at home to care for their children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion,

The patriarchal society where

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take the feminine

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, looking after their offspring

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of working has changed dramatically, where by now

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also

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work and aren't solely looking after the house. It is agreed that

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are nurturers by nature and should take the

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of the

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more seriously, in order to raise their

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with etiquette matters, which may be contradicted as within our modern epoch, times are changing and people believe in gender equality.

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essay will discuss how the reverse roles have subjectively changed for the worse, leading to a negative outcome, with confused roles. 

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our genetics,

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carry a

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for a substantial amount for

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, they are

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because of the unconditional love and

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they can provide.

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, by nature,

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breastfeed the

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and most prominent

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the offspring's life,

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indicates that

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have been created to take

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of the

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and

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about their wellbeing.

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, if using their

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efficiently,

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can make

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for both work and the

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of their

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. Another reason, heightening the decision to be a stay-at-home

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, is the

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's mannerisms,

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, they are easily influenced and can be swayed on the wrong path, when the

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resides at home

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of working, she can essentially teach them wrong from right, being the uttermost important influence within their lives.

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implimented

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within boarding school

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,

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become resentful

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their teachers as they feel they are not obliged to follow

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a stranger.

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is crucial, it could be argued that

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both parents

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crucial in

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, as the

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will ultimately

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be surrounded by both companies, meaning

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could essentially work

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. In conclusion

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within

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the

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's life is crucial, as not only do they

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for the

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but

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teach them obedience.

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may not be possible if they

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to follow their careers. In my opinion, being a

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is a

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job, meaning they should merely take

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of their

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until they are old enough to be more independent.