IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 5

The graph below shows the number of complaints made about noise to Environmental Health authorities in the city of Newtown between 1980 and 1996. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of complaints made about noise to Environmental Health authorities in the city of Newtown between 1980 and 1996. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#complaints #noise #health #authorities #city #newtown #summarise #information #features #comparisons
The line chart demonstrates how many
complaints
 with regard to noise the Environmental Health authorities heard in
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
Newtown city over a sixteen-year period between 1980 and 1996.
Overall
, what stands out from the graph is the number of
complaints
 about road works saw a dramatical climb,
while
, domestic
complaints
 dropped gradually.
Also
 evident is by 1988, the number of
complaints
 with regards to road work and traffic noise significantly slipped by 200,
whereas
, in 1988 the former started to grow and soared to over 1200 in 1996 and the latter witnessed a significant change. Another important fact is
although
at
Add the comma(s)
, at
show examples
 the beginning of the
priod
Correct your spelling
period
, the number of
complaints
 about domestic and factories was marginally different, in 1982 they both reached 600.
Additionally
, The figure for factories overtook the domestic and after a slight climb, in 1990 it began to go down and reached 700 in the final year.
Moreover
, the domestic fell steadily to 100 by the end of the period.
Submitted by shamim1999 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
▼
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
▼
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words complaints with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "climb" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: