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Three pie charts below shows the changes in annual spending by a particular UK schools in 1981, 1991 and 2002. Summarise the informatin by selecting and reporting the main featrures, and make comparisons where relevant.

Three pie charts below shows the changes in annual spending by a particular UK schools in 1981, 1991 and 2002. Summarise the informatin by selecting and reporting the main featrures, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie charts illustrate the comparison of
yearly
Correct article usage
the yearly
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 expenses of a
school
 in the UK during a
ten-years
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ten-year
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 period.
Overall
 in both
year
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years
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, the most significant
school
's spending was on teachers'
salaries
,
while
 the least was
insurance
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on insurance
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.
To begin
, teachers'
salaries
 became the most considerable expense
which
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apply
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accounted
Wrong verb form
accounting
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 for
two third
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two-thirds
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 of the spending proportion in 1981.
Moreover
, the other workers'
salaries
 placed the second highest spending for more than a quarter compared to other expenses.
At
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In
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 the same
year
,
school's
Correct article usage
the school's
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 resources and
furnitures
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furniture
types of furniture
pieces of furniture
items of furniture
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 and
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
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was
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apply
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accounted for 15% each. Meanwhile, the insurance cost was being the most insignificant spending of the
year
.
On the other hand
, in 1991, teachers'
salaries
was
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were
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 still the highest amount where it was increased by 10% compared to ten
year
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years
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 before.
Similarly
, the cost spent
for
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on
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school's
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the school's
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 resources increased by 5%
whereas
 furniture and equipment
cost
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costs
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was drop
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dropped
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into
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by
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 5%. Meanwhile, other workers'
salaries
 and insurance costs were
insigficantly
Correct your spelling
insignificantly
 changed over a
ten-years
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ten-year
show examples
 period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, year, salaries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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