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Three pie charts below shows the changes in annual spending by a particular UK schools in 1981, 1991 and 2002. Summarise the informatin by selecting and reporting the main featrures, and make comparisons where relevant.

Three pie charts below shows the changes in annual spending by a particular UK schools in 1981, 1991 and 2002. Summarise the informatin by selecting and reporting the main featrures, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given pie charts illustrate the comparison of
yearly
Correct article usage
the yearly
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 expenses of a
school
Use synonyms
 in the UK during a
ten-years
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ten-year
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 period.
Overall
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 in both
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year
Fix the agreement mistake
years
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, the most significant
school
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's spending was on teachers'
salaries
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,
while
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 the least was
insurance
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on insurance
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.
To begin
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, teachers'
salaries
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 became the most considerable expense
which
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apply
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accounted
Wrong verb form
accounting
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 for
two third
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two-thirds
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 of the spending proportion in 1981.
Moreover
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, the other workers'
salaries
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 placed the second highest spending for more than a quarter compared to other expenses.
At
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In
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 the same
year
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,
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school's
Correct article usage
the school's
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 resources and
furnitures
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furniture
types of furniture
pieces of furniture
items of furniture
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 and
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
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was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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accounted for 15% each. Meanwhile, the insurance cost was being the most insignificant spending of the
year
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.
On the other hand
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, in 1991, teachers'
salaries
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was
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were
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 still the highest amount where it was increased by 10% compared to ten
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year
Change to a plural noun
years
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 before.
Similarly
Linking Words
, the cost spent
for
Change preposition
on
show examples
Use synonyms
school's
Correct article usage
the school's
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 resources increased by 5%
whereas
Linking Words
 furniture and equipment
cost
Fix the agreement mistake
costs
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was drop
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dropped
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into
Change preposition
by
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 5%. Meanwhile, other workers'
salaries
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 and insurance costs were
insigficantly
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insignificantly
 changed over a
ten-years
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ten-year
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 period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, year, salaries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Annual spending
  • Percentage
  • Proportion
  • Allocate
  • Fluctuate
  • Increase/Decrease
  • Trend
  • Expenditure
  • Category
  • Salaries
  • Furniture and equipment
  • Resources
  • Insurance
  • Notable
  • Decline
  • Growth
  • Comparison
  • Decade
  • Shift in priorities
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