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The pie chart shows the main migration reasons to and from the United Kingdom in 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows the main migration reasons to and from the United Kingdom in 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
Pie
chart
 describes about main
reasons
people
 moved to/from the
UK
 in 2007. There are 7
reasons
 why
people
 migrate to the
UK
. The first
pie
chart
 shows the
reason
people
 immigrate to the
UK
. Most
people
 do leave the
UK
 because definite job, 30% gave these
reasons
. The second biggest cause is formal study until 26%. And below 15% community in the
UK
 go to another country because of other
reasons
,
such
 as 15% because accompanied, 12% because looking for work, and 6% because no logic stated. Almost the same as the first
pie
chart
. Mostly, the
reason
population
Correct article usage
the population
show examples
 come to the
UK
 is because of definite jobs 29%. But different with immigration, the second
reason
people
 emigration to the
UK
 because accompanied by 22%. No
reason
 stated is the third
reason
 why
people
 come to the
UK
. 18% of
people
 gave these
reasons
. And below 15%
people
 gave other
reasons
such
 us looking for work, formal study and the other
reasons
.The
pie
chart
 above shows the main migration
reasons
 to and from the United Kingdom in 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pie, chart, reasons, people, uk, reason with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gave" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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