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The two maps depict about some changes in the layout of Buduran beach town during the 29-year period since 1995.

The two maps depict about some changes in the layout of Buduran beach town during the 29-year period since 1995.
The two maps give information about some changes in the layout of Buduran
beach
Use synonyms
 town during the 29-year period since 1995. From an
overall
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 perspective, there have been significant transformations in the
beach
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 town from industrial to
be
Unnecessary verb
apply
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more residential.
In addition
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, the most noticeable developments are in the green area and the fishing industry
in
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on
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 the
beach
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. The green area which
included
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includes
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forest
Correct article usage
a forest
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 park and farmland
have
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has
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 changed into a
sport
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sports
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center
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centre
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 and it provides a golf course and two tennis courts.
Moreover
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, the fishing port has been eradicated to expand the sea in the south.
However
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, fish markets have been demolished to give space for the development of four-tower apartments. In front of the apartments, there are restaurants replacing the shopping
center
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centre
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 in 1995.
On the other hand
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, inhabitants side are adding several
quota
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quotas
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 for the building. They
constructs
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will construct
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 with total of four houses
during
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in
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 2024 and set up the new road access
in
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on
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 the west
sides
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side
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.
In addition
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, the hotel around the
beach
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 has built
the
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a
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 car area to
managed
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manage
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 the massive capacity of vehicles.
However
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,
café
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the café
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 stayed
on
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in
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 the same location
during
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from
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 1995 to 2024.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, in addition".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 91%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words beach with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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