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The graph below gives information about car ownership in Britain from 1971 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about car ownership in Britain from 1971 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph illustrates the information about gives information about car ownership in Britain in the period of 36 years between 1971 and 2007.
Overall
, ownership
two
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of two
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cars
 and three or more
cars
 tended
an
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to an
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 upward trend and no car presented a downward trend,
while
one
 car
a
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remain
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remained
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 changed through the whole surveyed period. For the first 16 years, there was an uptrend in the
percentage
 of two
cars
 from under 10 per
cent
 to 20 per
cent
. After, 1987 the
percentage
 of two
cars
a
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apply
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rise
in
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by
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nearly 30 per
cent
.
Beside
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Besides
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 from 1971 to 2007, the
percentage
 of three or more
cars
a jump
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jumped
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in
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by
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 18 per
cent
. from 1971 to 1987, the
percentage
 of
one
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cars
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car
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a
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apply
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rise
in
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to
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 45 per
cent
. Between 1987 and 2007, the
cars
one
 line a drop in the
percentage
 of
one
cars
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car
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 about 2
percent
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per cent
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.
However
, during the period
of
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from
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 1971 to 2007 the
percentage
 of three or more
cars
a
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climb
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climbed
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in
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by
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 8
percent
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per cent
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, one, percentage, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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