The Graph Above Shows Information About Employment Rates Across 6 Countries in 1995 and 2005

The Graph Above Shows Information About Employment Rates Across 6 Countries in 1995 and 2005
The bar chart details percentages of
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rates (
man
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and
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women
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) in six countries, in 1995 and 2005.
Overall
, men dominated the workplace in six countries
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both years. The highest average
of
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working
rate
was
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in 2005,
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the average
rate
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women's
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in 1995 was the lowest. For the first year, 1995, more than 70%
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in
Iceland
was a worker, just above
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Switzerland
(roughly 65%) and 10% more than in New
Zealand
, the
USA
,
Australia
, and the
UK
(close to 60%).
In contrast
by the same year,
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had lower percentages.
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Switzerland
ranked one with just about 55%, ahead of the
UK
(closely 50%), followed by the
USA
and
Iceland
(barely 45%), and
lastly
Australia
and New
Zealand
(hardly 25%). In terms of working
rate
in 2005,
Iceland
was ranked number one with more than 80%, slightly above Switzerland (around 78%).
Whereas
Australia
, the
UK
, New
Zealand
, and the
USA
grouped tightly
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70%.
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female's work
rate
was considerably much lower. Switzerland was almost 70%, though in
this
category the
UK
and the
USA
were the second (about 60%). Regarding the next
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highest number
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working,
Iceland
was just over 50%,
along with
Australia
and New
Zealand
(nearly 40%).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, iceland, zealand, usa, australia, uk with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • employment rates
  • economic indicators
  • comparison
  • trends
  • improvements
  • declines
  • anomalies
  • fluctuating
  • economic policy
  • financial conditions
  • technological advancements
  • educational levels
  • standards of living
  • poverty rates
  • well-being
  • implications
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