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the diagram below shows the stages in the recycling of aluminium drinks cans. Summaris the information by selectin and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

the diagram below shows the stages in the recycling of aluminium drinks cans. Summaris the information by selectin and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the
recycle
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 process of
an aluminium
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aluminium cans
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cans
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. The whole algorithm consists of
a
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four main stages that are cycled in a loop. The third part itself contains four sub-steps in it. The process starts from collecting
a
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future material and ends at a dealer point. The first stage is in the
center
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 of
collection
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, where aluminium
cans
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 are sorted from
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plastic, paper or organic trash and after that
are
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send
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 to a recycling zone. At
this
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 moment of
a
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production,
cans
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 are cleaned, squished and
was
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ready for
a
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the
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 following manipulation. The third stage is a complex schema, that a combination of
a
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four processes.
At
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 the
beginning
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cans
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 are melted down,
after
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and after
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 that new aluminium is rolled
to
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into
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 a thin sheet.
The next step is
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 when
cans
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 are created from previously done material. At
this
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 point
cans
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 are ready for exploitation, so they can
be send
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 to markets.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cans with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Recycling bins
  • Collection centers
  • Sorting
  • Debris
  • Compacting
  • Molten aluminium
  • Purification
  • Ingots
  • Rolled
  • Manufactured
  • Distribution
  • Energy consumption
  • Efficiency
  • Lifecycle
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