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the diagram below shows the stages in the recycling of aluminium drinks cans. Summaris the information by selectin and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

the diagram below shows the stages in the recycling of aluminium drinks cans. Summaris the information by selectin and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The picture
describe
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describes
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 the
producation
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production
 of aluminium cans. Overview, the diagram
contain
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contains
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 mainly
few
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a few
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 steps to complete the process which begins with collecting the garbegs
whereas
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and
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 ends final products. As per the given information,
firstly
, collect the used cans from the dustbin which are placed in the local market and area of the country
then
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than
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 with the help of truck, these
are transfer
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are transferred
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 to
recycling
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a recycling
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 centre in that they wash and clear the can effectively.
After
this
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this,
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 the process
is start
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starts
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 as old
can
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cans
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are melt
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melt
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 down
with
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at
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 high
temperature
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temperatures
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 which converted into new aluminium sheets. Moving towards
rest
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the rest
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 of the detail
that
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apply
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, aluminium
sheet
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sheets
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 are rolled up to form new cans. In
second
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the second
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last
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step
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steps
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steps,
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 they provided
proper
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the proper
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 shape to
can
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the can
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 and
fill
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filled
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 the cold drink into it
according to
capacity
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the capacity
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 of the can.
Last
 but not least,
can
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cans
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 are
label
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labelled
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 properly with
brand
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the brand
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 name and log
along with
price
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the price
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 of the can and
material
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the material
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 which are used in the can.
Finally
,
can
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the can
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 is ready
to
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for
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 sale in the market, again with
te
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the
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 aids
od
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of
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 trucks
can
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cans
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 are
delivery
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delivered
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 to
markey
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the markey
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 or drinks machine, so that people can drink them and throw
then
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them
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 into the dustbin,
afterthat
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after that
 process is again started.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Recycling bins
  • Collection centers
  • Sorting
  • Debris
  • Compacting
  • Molten aluminium
  • Purification
  • Ingots
  • Rolled
  • Manufactured
  • Distribution
  • Energy consumption
  • Efficiency
  • Lifecycle
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