Water is a natural source that should always be free. Government should ban the sale of bottled water. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

There is no secret that
water
is the main ingredient of
human
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body. It is a widely held view that
water
as
an
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natural material should be free and authorities should forbid the sale of packaged
water
, a theory which I fully
subsribe
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. First and
formost
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foremost
, producing plastic bottles to serve
water
can have bad effects on
environment
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the environment
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. Not only does
this
waste different
kind
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of
energies
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like fuel and human resources, but
also
it can influence
animals
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habitation.
In other words
,
due to
the fact that bottles are made of chemical materials, they won't digest in nature for a long time.
cosequently
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consequently
,
accidently
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accidents
can they
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by animals and threaten their lives. Another explanation could be the fact that it is the fact that
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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