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The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990, 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the man features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990, 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the man features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The following diagram illustrates the manufacture of milk annually in
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Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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, Australia, Tanzania and Guatemala, In 1990, 2000 and 2010. It is conspicuous
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Netherlands
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that Netherlands
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 and Australia produced more than others in these years.
According to
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 the table, Guatemala produced 26,000
litres
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 in 1990.
Also
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, 55,000
litres
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was
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were
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 manufactured in 2000 and eighty-four thousand
litres
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 in 2010.
Furthermore
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, Tanzania supplied one hundred and fifty-five thousand
litres
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 of milk in 2010 and almost 1,42,000
litres
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 of
this
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 goods were generated in two
thousands
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thousand
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.
Moreover
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,
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Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 generated 11,262,000
litres
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 in 1990
also
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 11,155,000
litres
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 were supplied in 2000.
In addition
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,
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Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 manufactured almost 11 million
litres
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 in 2010. In conclusion,
this
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 chart demonstrates the output of milk annually in four countries in 1990, 2000, and 2010. It is obvious Guatemala had the lowest output in
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 period. Plus,
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Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 had the highest generation
according to
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 the table.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, also".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words netherlands, litres with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annually
  • production
  • trends
  • increased
  • decreased
  • significantly
  • comparatively
  • figures
  • ranking
  • summarize
  • observations
  • patterns
  • consistently
  • growth
  • decline
  • noticeable
  • highlight
  • emphasize
  • yearly
  • countries
  • data
  • support
  • insights
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