Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. film stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid?
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popular
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people
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also
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believe
charga
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charge
charged
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advertisement
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believe
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side
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men
femiles
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females
families
donet
their Correct your spelling
donate
money
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to many
school
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schools
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the country
country
economy. Many Business Change noun form
country's
person
spend their money
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Reliance
person
use their amount to open new school
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schools
hospital
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hospitals
provied
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provided
provide
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health
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checkups
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donate
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schools
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to schools
situation
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situations
other
.
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others
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negative
negatives
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society's
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societies
Actors
do a lot of bad advertising and it is not usefull
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useful
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for
childrens
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children
youngstar
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young stars
children's
and parents follow their many Change noun form
children
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and Change noun form
heroes
Actors
and they looks
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look
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at their
post
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posts
in
mobile and other technology. It is a bad impression in our Change preposition
on
ganarsion
and Correct your spelling
mansion
garrison
city
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cold drinks and many others and they take more Wrong verb form
advertise
money
. hence
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advertis
nicotine products and their nicotine Correct your spelling
advertises
eats
many young Change the verb form
eat
chaild
and many humans.
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child
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conclusion, some people say that their Change preposition
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actors
and sports man
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sportsman
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our Change preposition
apply
country's
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country
in
many Change preposition
apply
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difficult
situation
. Change to a plural noun
situations
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think that their advertising are bad Fix the agreement mistake
Others
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image
to
our son and many Change preposition
of
generation
.Change to a plural noun
generations
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