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The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparions where relevant.

The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparions where relevant.
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Represented chart illustrates how
energy
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 is produced by using geothermal
energy
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. Generally, to generate
energy
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 they evaporate
water
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 and after using that
steam
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 to produce
energy
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.
Firstly
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, there is cold
water
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that is
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 pumped down by 4.5 km and after the
injection
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injection,
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 it
is going
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goes
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 through a geothermal zone.
Geothermal
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The geothermal
A geothermal
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 zone is
the
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a
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 zone in which there are a lot of hot rocks and when cold
water
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is going
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goes
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 through that place it becomes hot and produces
steam
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. After heating
till
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to
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temperature
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the temperature
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 which is needed they pump hot
water
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 up by producing
well
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a well
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. After, when hot
water
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 is transported to the condenser it becomes
steam
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 because of the temperature and
this
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steam
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 is used to power a turbine
that
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is turning
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 around when
steam
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 is going inside by producing more
energy
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.
Then
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, when it turns around till
energy
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 is produced and after
that
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that,
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 it is transferred to the generator which is powered by a turbine.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, water, steam with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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