The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparions where relevant.

The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparions where relevant.
Represented chart illustrates how
energy
is produced by using geothermal
energy
. Generally, to generate
energy
they evaporate
water
and after using that
steam
to produce
energy
.
Firstly
, there is cold
water
that is
pumped down by 4.5 km and after the
injection
Add a comma
injection,
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it
is going
Wrong verb form
goes
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through a geothermal zone.
Geothermal
Add an article
The geothermal
A geothermal
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zone is
the
Correct article usage
a
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zone in which there are a lot of hot rocks and when cold
water
is going
Wrong verb form
goes
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through that place it becomes hot and produces
steam
. After heating
till
Change preposition
to
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temperature
Correct article usage
the temperature
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which is needed they pump hot
water
up by producing
well
Correct article usage
a well
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. After, when hot
water
is transported to the condenser it becomes
steam
because of the temperature and
this
steam
is used to power a turbine
that
is turning
Wrong verb form
turns
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around when
steam
is going inside by producing more
energy
.
Then
, when it turns around till
energy
is produced and after
that
Add a comma
that,
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it is transferred to the generator which is powered by a turbine.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, water, steam with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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