The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparions where relevant.

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Represented chart illustrates how

energy

is produced by using geothermal

energy

. Generally, to generate

energy

they evaporate

water

and after using that

steam

to produce

energy

Firstly

, there is cold

water

that is

pumped down by 4.5 km and after the

injection

Add a comma

injection,

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is going

Wrong verb form

goes

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through a geothermal zone.

Geothermal

Add an article

The geothermal

A geothermal

show examples

zone is

the

Correct article usage

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zone in which there are a lot of hot rocks and when cold

water

is going

Wrong verb form

goes

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through that place it becomes hot and produces

steam

. After heating

till

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temperature

Correct article usage

the temperature

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which is needed they pump hot

water

up by producing

well

Correct article usage

a well

show examples

. After, when hot

water

is transported to the condenser it becomes

steam

because of the temperature and

this

steam

is used to power a turbine

that

is turning

Wrong verb form

turns

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around when

steam

is going inside by producing more

energy

Then

, when it turns around till

energy

is produced and after

that

Add a comma

that,

show examples

it is transferred to the generator which is powered by a turbine.

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