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The table below describes water usage for 3 different purposes in 6 countries in 2003.

The table above provides an illustration of
water
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 expenditures in the domestic, agricultural, and industrial sectors by some of the biggest
countries
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 in the world
such
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 as
Canada
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, the United Kingdom, China, Australia, India and Japan in 2003. The trend shows these
countries
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 allocate their
water
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 to different areas, with most
water
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 spent on agricultural sections, except for Australia and
Canada
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. To look
further
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 into details, nations like the United Kingdom, China, and India are marked as the largest
water
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 consumers for agriculture by spending 90%. 87% and 82% respectively and calculate the rest of the sections analyzed with less than 20%.
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, for domestic usage,
water
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 is mainly used by the Australian people and the people of
Canada
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 with a slightly under 65% figure
while
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countries
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 like India and Japan spent less than 20 %, and the other
countries
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 use less than 7%. Meanwhile, in the industrial part, all
countries
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 mentioned spent the least portion with less than 10%, excluding Japan with 15% and
Canada
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 with 32%.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, countries, canada with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • domestic usage
  • industrial usage
  • agricultural usage
  • cubic meters
  • per capita
  • water-intensive industries
  • sustainable water management
  • irrigation practices
  • efficient water use
  • developed vs developing nations
  • water scarcity
  • desalination
  • water footprint
  • resource allocation
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