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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of 3 metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and, make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of 3 metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and, make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 graph illustrates the
rate
 of changing prices of three different
metals
 in all the months of 2014. We can see here,
the
Correct word choice
that the
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 graphs for all three
metals
is
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fluctuated and changed continuously. The price of nickel dipped more compared to
other
Correct article usage
the other
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 two
metals
. On the one hand, in
january
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January
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 the change
rate
 for nickel stood at 6%. Later, It faced a sharp decline and became 1% in
march
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March
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. The
rate
 was
same
Correct article usage
the same
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 for
april
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April
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.
Furthermore
, It witnessed
downward
Correct article usage
a downward
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rate
 again and stood at -3% in
june
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June
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.
Next,
it increased slightly to -1% and remained the same until
october
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October
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. It was -2% in
october
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October
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 and started to face an incline to 1% in
november
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November
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 and did not rise anymore.
On the other hand
, the
rate
 for zing was the lowest compared to two other
metals
 in the first month of 2014. It inclined 2% in
february
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February
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.
In Addition
, It faced
continuous
Correct article usage
a continuous
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 decrease and stood at -1% in June. The
rate
 was 1%
more
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higher
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 in the
last
 month of the year compared to the first.
Besides
, the percentage for copper started at 2%. Until July it never witnessed an incline. It stood at 1% from July to
september
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September
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 and
at the end
 of the
year
Add a comma
year,
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 the
rate
 was slightly more than 1%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, metals with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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