The graph below shows the hours of teaching per year done by each teacher in four different countries in 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the hours of teaching per year done by each teacher in four different countries in 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar graph depicts the
imformation
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information
about the
hours
of teaching per year done by each teacher in four different countries in 2001.
Overall
, the
hours
of teaching per year done by each teacher in
Japan
was the lowest in the four
contries
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countries
, next was
Spain
and
Iceland
.
Also
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USA was the highest
in
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all
contries
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countries
. In 2001, the
hours
at Primary in
Japan
,
Spain
and
Iceland
remained relatively constant, at about 600
hours
.
Besides
, the
hours
at Primary was the highest in four countries, at about 850
hours
.
Moreover
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the
hours
at Lower Secondary in
Japan
and
Spain
is
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are
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same
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the same
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at approximately 600
hours
,
then
Iceland
was the second at about 800
hours
and the USA was the highest at about 1080
hours
. The
hours
at Upper Secondary in
the
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Japan
was
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the lowest at about 600
hours
, next is
Iceland
with 790
hours
,
then
is
Spain
at about 990
hours
and the highest is
USA
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the USA
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at about 1090
hours
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual hours of teaching
  • teaching workload
  • educational systems
  • teacher-student ratio
  • significantly
  • slightly
  • noticeably
  • gap
  • highest/lowest number of hours
  • compare
  • contrast
  • reflect
  • variations
  • distribution of teaching hours
  • average
  • respectively
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