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The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart illustrates the
percentage
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 of
expenditures
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 for five major categories in the United
states
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States
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, Canada, the United Kingdom and Japan in the year 2009.
Overall
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, the
percentage
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 of
expenditures
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housing
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on housing
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 was the highest of all through the surveyed period and the
percentage
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 of
expenditures
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health
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on health
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 care saw the shortest of all
bar
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bars
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.
The
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Of the
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percentage
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expenditures
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food
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for food
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 of 4
country
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countries
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, the
percentage
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expenditures
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 of Japan was the highest
of
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apply
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per
cent
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. The
percentage
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expenditures
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 of the United Kingdom
higher
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are higher
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 than Canada 15%.
Then
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, the
percentage
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 expenditure of Canada
higher
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is higher
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 than the per
cent
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 expenditure of
United
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the United
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 States.
Sencondly
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Secondly
, the
per
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percentage of
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cent
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expenditures
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housing
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on housing
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 have the per
cent
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 of United
State
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States
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was the highest
about
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at about
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 per
cent
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.
Finally
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, the
percentage
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 of transportation have Japan was the shortest of all.
However
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, the per
cent
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 of healthcare and clothing was the shortest of the surveyed period. There were the
percent
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per cent
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expenditures
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 of
United
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the United
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 Kingdom
has
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have
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 development .

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, expenditures, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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