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The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart illustrates the
percentage
 of
expenditures
 for five major categories in the United
states
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States
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, Canada, the United Kingdom and Japan in the year 2009.
Overall
, the
percentage
 of
expenditures
housing
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on housing
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 was the highest of all through the surveyed period and the
percentage
 of
expenditures
health
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on health
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 care saw the shortest of all
bar
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bars
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.
The
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Of the
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percentage
expenditures
food
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for food
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 of 4
country
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countries
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, the
percentage
expenditures
 of Japan was the highest
of
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apply
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per
cent
. The
percentage
expenditures
 of the United Kingdom
higher
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are higher
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 than Canada 15%.
Then
, the
percentage
 expenditure of Canada
higher
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is higher
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 than the per
cent
 expenditure of
United
Correct article usage
the United
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 States.
Sencondly
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Secondly
, the
per
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percentage of
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cent
expenditures
housing
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on housing
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 have the per
cent
 of United
State
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States
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was the highest
about
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at about
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 per
cent
.
Finally
, the
percentage
 of transportation have Japan was the shortest of all.
However
, the per
cent
 of healthcare and clothing was the shortest of the surveyed period. There were the
percent
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per cent
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expenditures
 of
United
Correct article usage
the United
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 Kingdom
has
Correct subject-verb agreement
have
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 development .
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, expenditures, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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