Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. But others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject they are good at or find the most interesting. Discuss both sides and give more options.

It can be argued that
students
should concentrate on
subjects
that are taught in institutions
while
others opine that they should only focus on the
subjects
which they are good at. I agree with the former statement and provide my information on the one hand,
students
should learn all the curriculum
subjects
that are being taught in school.
this
is because
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these
subjects
are compulsory for the
students
to get the higher education once they pass through it.
consequently
,
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with
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it student need to do it
practicallyand
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practically and
practically
polish their skills of what has been taught in class or in a laboratory.
for instance
, take
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example of chemistry and physics
subject
, both have
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and laboratory
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that should be performed by the
students
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to get good grades in the finals
therefore
,
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if they
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the knowledge of
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subject
,
then
they have
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good chance of clearing the entrance examination
on the other hand
, some
students
are better in a
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particular
subject
which
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a piece of cake for them to understand
it
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easily. what
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mean by
this
, is that
students
find themselves connected with the
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mind and find
thier
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their
text visualizing and easy to memorized it.
furthermore
, they
also
score much better than their peers even though they lack behind
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subjects
thus
, it
make
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them
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easier
option to have a career in it and pursue their dream
for example
,
i
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was very bad at math and had always stayed behind in my
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period but had
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foundation of skills in
computer
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which is why
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am pursuing it right now to recapitulate, despite having a strong grip
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particular
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particulor
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particular
subject
and not
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in other
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curriculum
curriculom
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believe that having
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foundation in every
subject
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you ahead of others and
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doors
of
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opportunities for
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stream of education
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Task Response
For task achievement, ensure that your essay fully addresses all parts of the prompt. Both sides of the argument and your own opinion should be clearly discussed with a balance in development. Additionally, work on providing a clear position throughout your response and a conclusion that reiterates your main points.
Coherence and Cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, create a more logical structure in your essay by organizing ideas into clear paragraphs, each with a distinct main idea and cohesive supporting details. Use a range of cohesive devices to link your ideas more effectively and avoid repetitive sentence structures.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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