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you are going on a month training programme to the UK and know that the head of the course would like one of the participants to be the social event's organiser. Write a letter to the Training Organiser: -expressing your interest in the role -requesting more information about it -explain what experience you have

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Dear põlatbek I am writing
this
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 letter to request you to attend
in
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the social event, as you know that I am heading for a month cor a
tranining
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training
 programme in the UK and you are looking for
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 organizer for the
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seminar
. I would like to express my interest in
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partucular
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particular
 position
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 organize social papers work and arrange meetings at the same place . I would like to share my qualities that would be helpful to select the right candidate.
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, I am curious to know more information
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the
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social events which help to boost my level to determine how I can prepare for the social function
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, I would like you to provide excess information to me so I could be quite ready to do
presentation
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 and all. I would like to expand my ability
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 experience which is really based on a volunteer at the community centre.
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 work experience can guide me to deal with
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 type of event where a number of people
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gather
 in a
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particular
 place. I hope you
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 your letter soon. Yours faithfully, T.farrux
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coherence cohesion
Ensure your letter has a clear introduction stating your purpose, followed by separate paragraphs for each point. Use a formal structure and sign your letter appropriately.
coherence cohesion
Begin with a formal salutation, such as 'Dear [Training Organiser's name or title],' and close with 'Yours sincerely,' if you know the name, or 'Yours faithfully,' followed by your full name.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph should focus on a single idea, such as expressing interest, requesting information, and explaining your experience. Ensure you don't mix topics within a paragraph.
task achievement
Address all parts of the task, and ensure you provide enough detail about your experience and interest in relation to the social events organiser role.
task achievement
Maintain a formal writing tone throughout the letter. Avoid informal language and contractions, and use complete sentences.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Expression of Interest
  • Social Events Organizer
  • Event Management
  • Team Leadership
  • Voluntary Activities
  • Collaborative Efforts
  • Multicultural Awareness
  • Proactivity
  • Innovations
  • Logistics
  • Coordination Skills
  • Diverse Group Dynamics
  • Enthusiastic Approach
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