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The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two charts illustrate the material status of all the
people
 in both
Canada
 and
Australia
.
Overall
, most of the
people
 in both countries have been separated but not divorced and married
while
 the least are divorced.
Ther
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There
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 are no
same sex
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same-sex
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 marriages in
Australia
. 2% of the
population
 is divorced in
Australia
whereas
 7% are widows in
Canada
. Single citizens in
Australia
 are 2% less than those in
Canada
. There are more separated but not divorced
people
 in
Australia
 as compared to
Canada
. 3% of
Canada
's
population
 is
same sex
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same-sex
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 marriage.
Moreover
, there are more than 17% of married couples in
Australia
 than in
Canada
. The number of
people
never
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who never
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 married in
Canada
 is just over 2% that in
Australia
while
 the number of widows in both countries is almost the same. There are no
same sex
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same-sex
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 marriages in
Australia
's
population
. The
population
in
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of
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Canada for
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Canada's
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 widows is equal to
those
Correct determiner usage
that
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 of
people
never
Correct pronoun usage
who never
show examples
 married.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, canada, australia, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • marital status
  • population
  • pie charts
  • percentage
  • categories
  • Married
  • Single
  • Divorced
  • Widowed
  • distribution
  • noticeable trends
  • comparison
  • significantly different
  • similarities
  • striking differences
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