You are due to move into a rented apartment next month but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter: – explain your situation – describe your problems – tell him/her when you think you can move in

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Dear Mr Sharma, I am writing

this

letter to draw your immediate attention to some major problem that I am facing

due to

that

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would

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will

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not be able

move

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to move

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in from next month. Currently, I am living in New Delhi and

due to

some political issue our city is under curfew and we are not allowed to travel until or unless

its

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it's

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an emergency.

According to

the sources,

this

situation will

last

for more than a month and till that time it is not possible for me to travel to

Hydrabad

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Hyderabad

Moreover

, I know it is

the

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busy time of year and people are looking for

appartments

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apartments

but it would be great if you keep

this

place booked for me. I promise to move in from 1st March 2024 with the first flight I could find and would even

tranfer

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transfer

you half

rent

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the rent

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in advance. I apologize for all the

inconvience

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inconvenience

that you face. I hope you will address my concern and would help me in

this

difficult time.

Your

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Yours

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Sincerely, Simran

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Task Achievement

The introduction can be improved by mentioning the intended apartment address or specific rental agreement details, which would make it more personalized and relevant.

Task Achievement

Try to include precise dates and a potential solution or alternative arrangements for the inconvenience caused, which would demonstrate a fuller response to the task.

Coherence & Cohesion

Use clear paragraphing and organize the content into distinct segments: introduction, explanation of the problem, potential solutions, and conclusion for better coherence.

Coherence & Cohesion

Expand on the description of your problems using more complex sentence structures and linking words to enhance cohesion.

Coherence & Cohesion

Conclude the letter with a polite request for a response or a suggested follow-up action, ensuring a complete and courteous closing.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

173 words

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