The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in

each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts provide information about the average rates
in
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types of nutrients that are contained in typical
meals
which might be unhealthy if consumed a lot.
Overall
, there are 3 main types of nutrients on the charts which consist of
Sodium
, Saturated
fats
and Added
Sugar
. Starting with Breakfast, 14% of
Sodium
is contained in morning
meals
, and 16% of both Saturated
fats
and Added Sugars are found in breakfast.
On the other hand
, lunch
meals
contain a lot more
Sodium
and 26% of Saturated
fats
,
as well as
19% of Added
Sugar
. With the
last
2
meals
remaining, food served at Dinner
contain
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the most amount of
Sodium
and Fat out of all the other
meals
.
Additionally
, 23% of
Sugar
is found
at
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Dinner
based
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meals
.
Lastly
, Snacks contain 42% of
Sugar
which is the highest percentage compared to the 3 other food types,
along with
only 14%
Sodium
and 21% of Saturated
fats
.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words meals, sodium, fats, sugar with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • export value
  • economic sector
  • percentage change
  • increment
  • decrement
  • fluctuation
  • trend analysis
  • year-on-year comparison
  • significant growth/decline
  • stagnation
  • market dynamics
  • fiscal repercussions
  • trade balance
  • competitive advantage
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