Many people choose to travel abroad to learn a foreign language instead of studying in their home town. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this.

Some people choose to
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high quality
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educating
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in their home town
instead
of
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abroad to study a foreign language,
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increased significantly.
Although
there are several advantages
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for
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,it can have some disadvantages as
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in their home town decrease of
education
. I believe we should not ignore the drawbacks.I will try to discuss both sides of
this
and draw a conclusion. On the one hand,there are some obvious benefits of studying from foreign language. The first merit of it is supposed to be that increases the quality of
education
,discovering new beautiful places.
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,
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in
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independent
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an idea,learning what
this
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do not know,knowledge increases,get rid of village work.
That is
because a human is distracted by work.
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of learning of foreign language,can some problems.One of the major disadvantages of it is
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reduction of
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area
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force.
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,become sluggish
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education
,reduction of schools,
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and poor-quality
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education
of
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young people.
This
is because many works are left to older people and rural areas do not
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. In conclusion,
while
learning new knowledge and teaching young children in her state can offer several positives,there may be some drawbacks too.From my personal point of view,
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of
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the disadvantages.
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task achievement
The essay needs a clearer introduction that directly addresses the question. State clearly the advantages and disadvantages of studying a language abroad versus studying at home.
coherence cohesion
The body paragraphs should each focus on one clear advantage or disadvantage. Use topic sentences to introduce the main idea of each paragraph.
task achievement
Use specific examples to support your points. This helps illustrate your arguments more clearly and show your understanding of the topic.
coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas more logically and ensure that each paragraph flows smoothly to the next, using cohesive devices such as linking words (however, for instance, therefore).
task achievement
Make sure your conclusion summarizes the advantages and disadvantages discussed, and clearly states your position or opinion.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to grammar, punctuation, and spelling to improve the clarity and professionalism of your essay.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic immersion
  • Cultural integration
  • International network
  • Conversational proficiency
  • Financial burden
  • Homesickness
  • Pedagogical differences
  • Culture shock
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