Many people choose to travel abroad to learn a foreign language instead of studying in their home town. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this.
Some people choose to
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learn
high quality
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high-quality
educating
in their home town Replace the word
education
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abroad to study a foreign language,Wrong verb form
travelling
has
increased significantly. Correct pronoun usage
which has
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there are several advantages Linking Words
learning
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to learning
comforts
,it can have some disadvantages as Fix the agreement mistake
comfort
of
in their home town decrease of Change preposition
apply
education
. I believe we should not ignore the drawbacks.I will try to discuss both sides of Use synonyms
this
and draw a conclusion.
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education
,discovering new beautiful places. Use synonyms
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human
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humans
is
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are
in
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apply
have
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and have
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this
do not know,knowledge increases,get rid of village work.Correct pronoun usage
they
That is
because a human is distracted by work.
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, Linking Words
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the distant
distant
of learning of foreign language,can some problems.One of the major disadvantages of it is Replace the word
distance
that
reduction of Correct determiner usage
the
rural
area Add an article
the rural
labor
force.Change the spelling
labour
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of
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in
education
,reduction of schools,Use synonyms
poor-quality
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and poor-quality
education
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of
young people.Change preposition
for
This
is because many works are left to older people and rural areas do not Linking Words
development
.
In conclusion, Replace the word
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while
learning new knowledge and teaching young children in her state can offer several positives,there may be some drawbacks too.From my personal point of view,Linking Words
advantages
of Correct article usage
the advantages
this
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outweighs
the disadvantages.Change the verb form
outweigh
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task achievement
The essay needs a clearer introduction that directly addresses the question. State clearly the advantages and disadvantages of studying a language abroad versus studying at home.
coherence cohesion
The body paragraphs should each focus on one clear advantage or disadvantage. Use topic sentences to introduce the main idea of each paragraph.
task achievement
Use specific examples to support your points. This helps illustrate your arguments more clearly and show your understanding of the topic.
coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas more logically and ensure that each paragraph flows smoothly to the next, using cohesive devices such as linking words (however, for instance, therefore).
task achievement
Make sure your conclusion summarizes the advantages and disadvantages discussed, and clearly states your position or opinion.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to grammar, punctuation, and spelling to improve the clarity and professionalism of your essay.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.