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the reason for increasing levels of pollution are the development industry and air travel.

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In the modern era, the levels of
pollution
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 increased significantly because
the
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growth
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 of industry and air travel. The issue is
unavoidable
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an unavoidable
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 consequence of the
industrial revolution
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Industrial Revolution
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 era.
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 with, the
pollution
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risen
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 in a place that
have
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 experienced a
growth
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 in
technology
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The industrial
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revolution
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 in the 18th century
at
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 Europe impacted the environment by using chemicals that
increase
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 the levels of
pollution
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,
while
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this
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growth
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increase
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increased
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 the economy of
European
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Europe
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. Looking at
more
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a more
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 recent
example
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, the data
in
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on
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 the internet show that in
the
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2020
aviation’s
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pollution
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were
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 70% higher than in 2005. It is important to
innovation
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the
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apply
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technology
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to
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in
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development
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developing
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 countries, but the innovation should be environmentally friendly to reduce the amount of
pollution
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green
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the green
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 industry
to push
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 the number of
pollution
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 because
this
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prioritise
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sustainable
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 and environmentally responsible
in
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the
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process
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processes
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. Nowadays, there are some countries that
be
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 considered to develop
technology
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 which
environmentally
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is environmentally
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 friendly and low levels of
pollution
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.
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, some of
developed
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the developed
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 countries
they
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have developed vehicles with
biodgradable
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biodegradable
 materials. In conclusion, the causes of
this
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growth
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 of
technology
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. So, it is important to
innovation
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technology
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 with environmentally friendly to decrease the
pollution
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Introduction Structure
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Paragraph Structure
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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