The bar chart below shows the percentage of households with acccess to the internet in three European countries between 2007 and 2019. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feautures, and make comparisons where relevent.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of households with acccess to the internet in three European countries between 2007 and 2019.

summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feautures, and make comparisons where relevent.
The bar chart
illustrate
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total
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proportion of households who are able to obtain the
internet
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in three particular European countries between 2007 and 2019.
overall
, The given figure gradually climbed between each and every
year
. The ercentage of
Germany
has
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high when compared to the
another
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two countries.
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the United Kingdom and
Spain
placed second and third position in the figure respectively. The proportion of
Germany
has slightly increased in every
year
.
Germany
grew
theirs
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country's
internet
access
from 70% to 79% between the
year
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years
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2007 and 2009 respectively. After
that
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they need almost six
years
to attain
theirs
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internet
facility to 90%. They
are
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slowly increased their figures to 85% in 2011. Again it
has
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climbed to approximately 88% in 2013.
Then
Germany
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reached
to
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90% in 2015. Again they have slight growth in 2017 and 2019 to 92% and 95% respectively. The United Kingdom increased their
internet
facilities for their citizens between 2007 and 2019. Every
year
they are focused
to grow
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theirs
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internet
access
. In 2007 they
are
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in 60% after that United Kingdom grew their
internet
access
to 70% in 2009.Again they have a marginal rise in 2011 and 2013 to 78% and 82% respectively.
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rose slightly to 90% in another four
years
.They
are
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grew slowly to 85% in 2015 and
acheived
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achieved
the figure of 90% in 2017.
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they reached their peak
to
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of
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90% in the
last
year
2019.
However
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the proportion for
the
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Spain
has smaller when compared to
the
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another
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other
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two countries.
Spain
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public
are
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got only 42% of
internet
facility
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facilities
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in 2007.But they
hve
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have
considerable growth in upcoming
years
.They climbed sharply to 52% in 2009. Again they have a
dramatical rose
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to 70% in another four
years
. They
are
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increased their facility to 62% in 2011 and 70% in 2013 respectively.In 2015 they
are
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climbed to 80% which is 10% smaller when compared to
Germany
. In 2017
Spain
have
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slow growth to *2%.
Atlast
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At least
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they
are obtain
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obtained
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90% of
internet
access
for their people in 2019.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words internet, year, germany, spain, access, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "climbed" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.

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