Excessive use of private cars is considered the main reason for the traffic jam in many cities, which is why the use of public transportation is encouraged. In your opinion, what are the pros and cons of using public transport?

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number of private vehicles in
city
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the city
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center
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is the major reason for traffic congestion. Promoting
public
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a public
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transportation
sysytem
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system
is one of the practical
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to tackle
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the merits
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and demerits of using
public
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the public
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transporting
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system. First and foremost, the public
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systems
are not reliable.
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, the public
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transport
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transporting
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system
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systems
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is
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not punctual to reach it is destinations, especially buses and trains.
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,
train
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trains
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of
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India
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railway, the largest train networking in the world, are often
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and people are
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their valuable time
to wait
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for
train
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trains
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.
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,
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public transport
are
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not accessible to every location. It has only limited services available
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countryside
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the countryside
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and rural areas,
therefore
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the country
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country side
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, more people
relay
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rely
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on private
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such
as cars.
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, public
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systems
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several advantages, one obvious advantage is the reduction of air pollution in the
city
center
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. In detail, if more people
would
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use public transport, the number of private vehicles will significantly reduce on
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, which will help to
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the
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carbon
emission
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emissions
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. To exemplify, In
Amserdam
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Amsterdam
, one of the most touristy
city
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in the world, has
signifcantly
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significantly
reduced
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air pollution after the
implimentation
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implementation
of
city
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the city
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tram.
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Moreover
, these
type
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types
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of transportation
systems
are economical
option
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than private transport. Day and seasonal
passess
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passes
are available in several cities, which will help the masses to save money. In conclusion, the public transportation
systems
are not
puctual
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punctual
to provide service and not accessible to all locations.
Whereas
,
this
transporting
systems
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system
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will help reduce air
polluation
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pollution
and save money.
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