The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of experts in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar graph depicts how much one country's

export

products

in different categories cost between 2015 and 2016.

Overall

, almost all

products

export

values increased over time, except the value of gems and jewellery

export

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exports

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. Petroleum and engineered

products

made the highest amount of contributions for that country in 2015 and 2016. In 2015, the value of petroleum

products'

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products

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export

Wrong verb form

exported

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was around 60

billion

dollars

, representing the most valuable

export

product compared to its counterparts. Engineered goods made the second-highest contribution with about 58

billion

dollars

, and

this

is followed by gems and jewellery exports with approximately 42

billion

dollars

of contribution in 2015. The amounts of money earned from agricultural

products

and textiles

export

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exports

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were just above 30

billion

dollars

and around 28

billion

dollars

respectively. After a year, both petroleum and engineered goods increased to about 62

billion

dollars

each.

While

the values of textiles and agricultural

products

rose to just above 30

billion

dollars

, gems and jewellery lost

its

Correct pronoun usage

their

show examples

marketshare

Correct your spelling

market share

of roughly 2

billion

dollars

one year later.

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