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The pie charts above show the percentages of industry sectors contributed to the economy of Turkey in 2000 and 2016. Write a report of at least 150 words reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts above show the percentages of industry sectors contributed to the economy of Turkey in 2000 and 2016. Write a report of at least 150 words reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts display to make a comparison of the economy by different sectors
such
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 as
agriculture
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, construction, manufacturing, trade, healthcare, business, hospitality, and government between 2000 and 2016.
Overall
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, most of the categories illustrated a modest change in the percentages in the economics of those features in those years.
Moreover
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, the significant change was in
agriculture
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, since
this
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 category dropped a small minority in 2016, highlighting healthcare and education which keep the same data. In 2000 the major percentage was in
agriculture
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, after hospitality, and government. The lowest was in construction, following finance and manufacturing with an insignificant minority.
In addition
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, in 2016 the piece show a big chance in comparison with the data in 2000, since
agriculture
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 went down by 10% less and construction kept the same analysis,
as well as
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 the categories that were with minimum percentages, rising little by little.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words agriculture with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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