Write about the following topic: Some people think that liking your job is more important than how much money you earn while others think that your salary is more important than how much you like your job. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Some
think
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that
favoing
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favouring
your employment is more
signigicant
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significant
than how much income you earn on the other side think that your
money
is more important than how much you like your
job
. when
the
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people choose the employment that they love ,they will
work
hard because they really like
this
job
and don'
t
feel
boring
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,always positive in feat it
help
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they
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them
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work
more
effective
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.
Clearly
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Clearly,
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if they did your favourite
job
, they would
by
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work
longer .
On
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another
opinion
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opinion,
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people select the feat have
high
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a high
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salary but they don'
t
like
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like it
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.
Have
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more
money
they can do anything
wtheyant
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they want
buy the thing they like ,it
also
make
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they
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them
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live a life
sufficient
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sufficiently
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. When two options are given and one
much
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must
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choose ,I personally think they should choose the one
have
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that has
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high
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a high
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income but you don'
t
like .Because you can
work
a
job
you don'
t
like but you can'
t
work
without
money
,
money
very
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important
in
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apply
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nowaday
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nowadays
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your life will more
hard
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harder
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if you
dont
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don't
have much
money
.You buy food with
money
, everything
need
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money
. In conclusion ,
choose
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choosing
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any options
it
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apply
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depend on how the people think about
this
question and
also
depend
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depends
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on each's person situation from that
give
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gives
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them the answer
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Your response should fully address all parts of the task. Present both views and your own opinion more clearly. Offer detailed reasons and examples to support your points.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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