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The pie graphs show the nutritional consistency of two dinners. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data. You should write at least 150 words.

The pie graphs show the nutritional consistency of two dinners. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data. You should write at least 150 words.
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The
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A
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 couple of pie chart describes the nutritional level
in
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of
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medium
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a medium
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 baked
potato
 and
macaroni
. Overview, in both given dinners, the amount of carbohydrates is maximum compared to other things. As per the provided information, the percentage of carbohydrates is highest with 35% and half in
medium
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a medium
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 baked
potato
 and
macaroni
 orderly. Interestingly, the saturated fat is 10% in
Medium
 baked
potato
,
whereas
 it is almost double in
second
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the second
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 given dinner. The difference of 3% is
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notice
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 in
Glocose
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Glucose
in
Medium
 baked
potato
 and
macaroni
,
whilest
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while
former
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the former
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 strand for large
propertion
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proportion
 at 15%. Moving towards
rest
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the rest
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 of the data, the other
nutrients
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nutrient
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 values
is
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are
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 15% in
medium
 baked potatoes which was 3
time
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times
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 less in
Macaroni
 dinner.
In contrast
, the proportion of proteins is around a quarter in
Medium
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a Medium
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 baked
potato
,
however
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however,
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 it is 11% in the
Macaroni
 dinner.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words medium, potato, macaroni with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutritional consistency
  • carbohydrates
  • proteins
  • fats
  • vitamins
  • minerals
  • fiber
  • proportion
  • component
  • pie graph
  • comparison
  • significant
  • balance
  • healthy
  • dietary choices
  • implications
  • absent
  • presence
  • macro-nutrients
  • micro-nutrients
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