The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

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The picture shows "Garlsdon"

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is one of the

town

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towns

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. There are 2 places that

supermarket

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supermarkets

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can come in at the town, which are "S1" and "S2".

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possible

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the west and it is

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the countryside

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. Beside to the left, there is a railway and it

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the middle of

town

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the town

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centre.

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the right,

industry

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area is located with 10,000 people and it is 12km far from "Hindon". Next, "S2"

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is another spot for

supermaket

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supermarket

supermarkets

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the middle of the map. A

towncenter

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town centre

; no traffic zone is surrounding it and

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industry area is

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located

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Also

, there are housing

spot

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spots

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the North and South.

Lastly

, we can use two main roads to go to Bransdon or Cransdon

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3 paragraphs

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accessibility
Congestion
Economic benefits
Environmental impact
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Job creation
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Pollution
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Traffic patterns
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