The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

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The picture shows "Garlsdon"

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that

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which

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is one of the

town

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towns

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. There are 2 places that

supermarket

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supermarkets

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can come in at the town, which are "S1" and "S2".

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one

possble

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possible

space "S1" is

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the west and it is

countryside

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the countryside

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. Beside to the left, there is a railway and it

past

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is past

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the middle of

town

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the town

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centre.

Also

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, beside

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apply

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the right,

industry

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the industry

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area is located with 10,000 people and it is 12km far from "Hindon". Next, "S2"

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that

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which

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is another spot for

supermaket

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supermarket

supermarkets

is sited

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the middle of the map. A

towncenter

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town centre

; no traffic zone is surrounding it and

moreover

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industry area is

placing

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located

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Also

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, there are housing

spot

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spots

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the North and South.

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, we can use two main roads to go to Bransdon or Cransdon

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17
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detected issues

<4

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

128 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Accessibility
Congestion
Economic benefits
Environmental impact
Foot traffic
Green space
Job creation
Local property values
Parking availability
Pollution
Proximity
Public transportation
Sustainability
Traffic patterns
Residential areas
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The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

You accidentally left an item of clothing at your friend’s house. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: · describe the item of clothing · explain where you left it say what you would like your friend to do with the item of clothing

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In some countries, online shopping is gradually replacing in-store shopping. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative impacts. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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