The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

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The picture shows "Garlsdon"

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is one of the

town

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. There are 2 places that

supermarket

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supermarkets

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can come in at the town, which are "S1" and "S2".

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the west and it is

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the countryside

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. Beside to the left, there is a railway and it

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the middle of

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centre.

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the right,

industry

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area is located with 10,000 people and it is 12km far from "Hindon". Next, "S2"

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is another spot for

supermaket

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supermarket

supermarkets

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the middle of the map. A

towncenter

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town centre

; no traffic zone is surrounding it and

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industry area is

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, there are housing

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spots

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the North and South.

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, we can use two main roads to go to Bransdon or Cransdon

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The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

In many countries, the gap between the rich and the poor is widening. What problems does this situation cause, and what solutions can you suggest?

Nowadays there is an increase in social problems involving young people because more parents spent time at work than with their children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

People are wearing western-style clothes rather than more traditional clothes. Why is this? Is it a negative or positive development?

Competition for university study is becoming increasingly strong. Why are universities becoming more competitive? Is this a positive or negative development?

Some people think parents should supervise their children’s activities closely, while others believe children should have more freedom. Discuss