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The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
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The picture shows "Garlsdon"
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
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 is one of the
town
Change to a plural noun
towns
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. There are 2 places that
supermarket
Fix the agreement mistake
supermarkets
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 can come in at the town, which are "S1" and "S2".
First,
one
possble
Correct your spelling
possible
 space "S1" is
at
Change preposition
in
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 the west and it is
countryside
Correct article usage
the countryside
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. Beside to the left, there is a railway and it
past
Add a missing verb
is past
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 the middle of
town
Add an article
the town
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 centre.
Also
, beside
to
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apply
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the right,
industry
Correct article usage
the industry
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 area is located with 10,000 people and it is 12km far from "Hindon". Next, "S2"
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
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 is another spot for
supermaket
Correct your spelling
supermarket
supermarkets
 is sited
at
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in
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 the middle of the map. A
towncenter
Correct your spelling
town centre
; no traffic zone is surrounding it and
moreover
 industry area is
placing
Verb problem
located
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.
Also
, there are housing
spot
Fix the agreement mistake
spots
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at
Change preposition
in
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 the North and South.
Lastly
, we can use two main roads to go to Bransdon or Cransdon
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, that is".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessibility
  • Congestion
  • Economic benefits
  • Environmental impact
  • Foot traffic
  • Green space
  • Job creation
  • Local property values
  • Parking availability
  • Pollution
  • Proximity
  • Public transportation
  • Sustainability
  • Traffic patterns
  • Residential areas
  • Shopping convenience
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