Although the prices of fuels have greatly increased over the last decade or two, it is argued that further increases in fuel prices are the only way to reduce world consumption of fuel and lesson pressure on worlds fuel resources To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Over the
last
decade
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the costs of
fuel
have definitely risen and it can be argued that an increase in
fuel
price will enhance global economic security.
However
, it is not the only way to lessen the consumption of
fuel
.To get my point across,
i
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will present some
well supported
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arguments in
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essay.
Firstly
, as we know, in our society ,
fuel
resources are not that limited,
for
this
reason
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reason,
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government or social scientists should bring new innovations.
Moreover
, people argue that countries with
lack
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a lack
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of financial support physically can not afford the high level
fuel
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of fuel
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costs.
For instance
, in Kazakhstan , the majority of unemployed males or even females depend on their income from public transportation. These drivers typically pay for the gas themselves using the money they earn by driving on passengers. For that reason , deprived individuals can not survive in these kinds of circumstances.
On the other hand
, political ideologies
shows
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that with
this
gas
prices
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price
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increase , a lot of reaction occurs,
such
as
dramatic
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a dramatic
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rise in food costs or other sectors .
Due to
this
, inhabitants will take many rallies in the streets , after conflicts
may
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appear among themselves and
this
can only lead to
the
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apply
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global economic crises. In conclusion , even though
if
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apply
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fuel
price
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prices
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is
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are
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about to increase
it
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they
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could have
a
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apply
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little impact on
global
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the global
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consumption of fossil fuels.
However
, rising
fuel
prices may lead to the failure of our economic system
due to
a lack of financial resources and
effect
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the effect
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of rising figures in all other products.
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task achievement
Be sure to fully respond to all parts of the task. While you have touched on the points, there's room to further clarify and develop your position on fuel prices and consumption.
coherence cohesion
Aim for clarity when presenting ideas. Ensure that your arguments are comprehensive and flow logically from one to the next. Developing clear topic sentences can help with this.
task achievement and coherence cohesion
Back up your main points with specific examples and details. It is important to illustrate your viewpoints with concrete evidence or examples to strengthen your argument.
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