The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart illustrates the sales of online shopping for retail fields in New Zealand from 2003 until 2013. There are four categories,
such
as books, film/music, clothes, and travel. The unit measurement is in percentage.
To begin
with, film/music is the category that experienced a drastic jump from 22% to 33% in 2013.
This
growth phenomenon made film/music become the first category to be bought online.
Similarly
, books
also
rose by approximately 22% in the same year.
On the other hand
, regardless of a strong start with 37% in 2003, travel had fallen by quite a lot after 10 years with just 29%.
Next,
people's preference to buy clothes online
also
changed in another direction.
Thus
, clothes had decreased to just a mere 16% in 2013.
Overall
, the proportion of changes in
four
Correct article usage
the four
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categories
are
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is
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fifty-fifty.
Nonetheless
the dramatic fall in 2010, people's preference to buy travel online still remained second.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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