Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in toda's world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than history. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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a steep drop in 1996,
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1,20 dollars per
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prices fluctuated, starting from 1994. Prices for
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two countries - France and Japan.
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task achievement
Make sure to address the prompt directly. Your essay should discuss the importance of history as a subject compared to science and technology.
coherence and cohesion
Develop a clear introduction and conclusion, clearly stating the topic and your opinion on it. The conclusion should summarize the main points made in the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Enhance logical structure by including topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to introduce the main ideas, and use linking words to connect ideas within and across paragraphs.
task achievement
Incorporate more detailed examples that directly relate to the significance of history as a school subject, as well as the importance of science and technology in today's world.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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