The map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write atleast 150 words.

The map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write atleast 150 words.
The information given
abouth
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about
the current and future developmental site of Norbition town are
depicicted
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depicted
in the
rendarded
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rendered
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pictogram
.
Overall
, it can be seen that
,
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noticable
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noticeable
changes will
be take
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place in the future plan.
To begin
with, there will no changes would
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about the town on
west
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the west
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.
However
,
river
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the river
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on the north will be
seggragated
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segregated
aggravated
by the roadway which leads to the new housing system on the north side.
Besides
, it
also
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the
sapce
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space
of farmland and will be moved towards
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the north
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north east
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northeast
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region.
On the other hand
, a new
round about
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will be created
on
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the south.
Moreover
, towards the east factories will be replaced by the housing scheme,
playarea
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play area
and
school
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schools
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. In between the two
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medical
center
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and shops will take place on
east
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the east
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and west
side
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respectively.
Furthermore
,
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the north-west
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north-west
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northwest
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area will be replaced by
hosuing
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housing
and
pathway
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.
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