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The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)

The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)
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The bar graphs depict data of people who have their own
computer
 in
percentage
 over a span of eight years from 2002 to 2010, and the information by showing the five types of education
level
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levels
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 in 2002 and 2010.
Overall
, the first graph reveals that the
percentage
 of
population
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the population
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 in 2010 outpaced
in
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that in
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 2002 among all kinds of school levels. The trend of data was gradually increased from 2002 to 2010. It is obvious that the highest number of people who have personal
computer
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computers
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 was in 2010,
whereas
 the
least
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lowest
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 amount of
computer
 owners was in 2002.
According to
 students who
were
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had
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 in non-high school diploma, the
percentage
 of their own
computer
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computers
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 went up significantly more than a half compared to 2002 and 2010,
estimate
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estimated
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 at 25
percents
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percent
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. Meanwhile,
percentage
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the percentage
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 of high school
graduate
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graduates
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 and college were
also
 surged. Looking at
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the master
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master
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master's
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 degree level, the data
of
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on
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 having
computer
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a computer
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 was 75
percent
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per cent
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 in 2002
while
 in 2010 was nearly
reach
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reached
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to
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apply
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90
percent
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per cent
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, which was the highest category of education level compared to the others in the same year.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words computer, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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