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Some people prefer to plan all their vacation activities while others prefer to be spontaneous. Which do you prefer? Why?

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A vacation should always be an enjoyable time, but not everyone plans them the same way.
Although
 I see the romance of being spontaneous with tourist activities, it is not my style.
Firstly
, some of the best activities are ones you must make reservations for. If,
for example
, I would want to go whale watching, I might not be able to if I don’t sign up early.
Secondly
, plans can still be altered if needed. When a better option spontaneously emerges, I have no issue with pivoting to the new, better option. In conclusion, planning for a vacation allows me to reserve popular activities
while
 not prohibiting flexibility.
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Strive for a more complex logical structure by providing clearer topic sentences and transition words to lead the reader from one point to the next more seamlessly. Additionally, try to expand on each main point with more detailed explanations or illustrations.
Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure that your introduction and conclusion are not only present but also clearly establish the topic and summarize your main points without introducing new information.
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Develop your main points further by providing more specific examples or anecdotes that illustrate your preference for planning vacations. This not only supports your argument better but also provides a more engaging essay for the reader.
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Work on making your response more complete by fully developing your ideas and examples. More detail and depth will make your argument more persuasive and satisfying.
Task Achievement
In your essay, aim to strike a balance between planning and spontaneity, elaborating on why planning doesn't eliminate the possibility to be spontaneous. Doing so will reflect a comprehensive understanding of the topic and show balanced reasoning.

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