The chart below shows the percentage change in the share of international students among university graduates in different Canadian provinces over a period of 5 years.
The chart indicates changes occurred in the percentage of international students between university graduates in some Canadian states from 2001 to 2006.
Overall
, graduates in all of Canada's provinces have increased in 5 years. Furthermore
, in both 2001 and 2005 New Brunswick had the highest share among the rest.
As can be observed, New Brunswick's numbers increased from a little over 5 per cent to more than 10% in 2006 followed by Nova Scotia .However
, British Columbia’s interest had the most significant uptrend which went from less then
5% to above 10% in the same stage as Nova Scotia.
As for the rest, all of them started with less than 5 per cent to more than that Replace the word
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, both Manitoba and Newfoundland and Labrador started from the same stage and ended up the same with each slightly more than 5% of the share.
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but not least , Ontario's share had the lowest rank of all in both yearsSubmitted by mhosseinnaseri14 on
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