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Some people believe that it is important give gifts to friends and family to show that we care about them.Others think that there are better ways to show that we care. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some humans say that it is significant to donate gifts to friends and family members to express that
we
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 kind
about
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 them. Other
group
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 of
people
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 believe that there are better methods to express
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our attention. In light of the presents are really attractive and it helps you that you have an argument with your close person. But there are
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 ways
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 that,
that is
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 talking with them or visiting your familiar human. I agree with
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 group of
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. On the one hand,
gift giving
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 is a great idea. The best thing that to give a gift to
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the person
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 who has fought. Because
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most individuals love to receive bestowals. If the
people
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 who you respect
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are upset with you, you can do
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 to cheer them up.
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However
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 you can
also
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 bestow
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presents on holidays or any special days.
This
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 way you can show them your homage.
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, many
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 now emphasize their love for their mothers or sisters by giving them flowers.
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, talking with them or telling them you are sorry after a fight is
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 a good technique. To show our love for
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, even if we tell them that we are liking. They will be happy with us.
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, it is
also
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 good to visit them as a sign of our esteem per them. We should go to see them.
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, given that face-to-face meetings are on the decline these days, so is affection, too. Because of
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, visiting relatives is important. In conclusion, I firmly believe that conversation and visiting are
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the best ways to express our trust and attention to
people
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.

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task achievement
The essay response needs to fully address the question and present a clear position throughout the response. Ensure that both views are discussed equally and that your opinion is stated clearly and developed with specific examples.
coherence and cohesion
Work on structuring the essay with a proper introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Each paragraph should have a clear central idea and be connected to each other logically and smoothly through the use of cohesive devices.
coherence and cohesion
Develop the main points by supporting them with specific examples and explanations. Use a range of linking words to create a smooth flow within and between paragraphs. Make sure that the conclusion sums up the arguments and clearly states your opinion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Tangible symbols
  • Affection
  • Materialism
  • Cultural traditions
  • Impact
  • Relationships
  • Quality time
  • Acts of service
  • Communication
  • Shared experiences
  • Equating
  • Emotional presence
  • Physical presence
  • Material possessions
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