The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart provides information about the assessment rates of world illiteracy which came from both
region
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regions
gender
in the course of the previous year. Fix the agreement mistake
genders
Overall
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it is clear that
the rates of global illiteracy in the Linking Words
countries
which are undeveloped has more percentages than the developed Use synonyms
countries
and Use synonyms
also
similar to female's rate that higher than Linking Words
male
.
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males
According to
the chart, there are 3 regions that have percentages of people who didn't know languages below 25%. Linking Words
Firstly
, the developed Linking Words
countries
had just 2% or 3% of all populations, whilst people who lived in Use synonyms
Caribbean
and Oceania had Correct article usage
the Caribbean
higher
ratio Correct article usage
a higher
around
8% to 12% Change preposition
of around
especially
in women rate in East Asia reached Add the comma(s)
, especially
to
20% of Change preposition
apply
total
people.
Turning to the rest regions, there are another 3 groups of Correct article usage
the total
countries
that had a higher proportion. Regarding Use synonyms
to
the rates of the males from Africa, Arab states and South Asia, they were assessed that 32%, 28% and 34% of their populations respectively, might Remove the preposition
apply
got
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get
be got
this
problem. Linking Words
Finally
, women from these Linking Words
countries
had a Use synonyms
significantly
number of illiteracies about 45-55%. Change the adverb
significant
As a result
, they became considerable groups of Linking Words
this
concern.Linking Words
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