The diagram below shows the process of using water to produce electricity

The diagram below shows the process of using water to produce electricity
The picture illustrates the production of
water
-based
electricity
with assistance from the hydroelectric generator. It can be seen that the process of making
electricity
from
water
consists of six processes.
First,
the heat from the sun makes sea
water
evaporate and create clouds.
Then
, the cold temperatures make the cloud
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until it precipitates into the
water
droplets, which will be stored in the dam. Afterwards, the dam’s door (valve) will be opened or closed to send the
water
into the turbines, once the
water
volume is adequate. In the
turbine
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the
water
will be converted into
electricity
and is delivered directly to be stored
the
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tower. Meanwhile, the remaining
water
from the conversion process is pumped back
to
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the reservoir through a pump machine.
Subsequently
, the
electricity
flows from the towers to the transformer station via the cables, before is distributed to several facilities,
such
as factories, schools, hospitals, and houses.
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