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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007,2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons whererelevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007,2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons whererelevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The chart below illustrates the number of US
households
 which is grouped by their annual
income
 in 2007, 2011 and 2015. In general, the number of
households
 which have
the
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an
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income
 between $75,000 and $99,999 is the least among the five numbers above these three years. Another interesting fact is that despite an unexpected decline in the number of
households
 with
the
Correct article usage
an
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income
more
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of more
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 than $100,000 in 2011, with small fluctuations, the the
overall
 data structure in these three years is almost the same. In 2007 and 2015, the structures of the numbers are the same, among which the
households
 making $100,000 or more
has
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have
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the highest quantity. The '$25,000-$49,999' group is
on
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in
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the
Correct article usage
apply
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second place
which
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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followed by the 'Less than $25,000' and the '$50,000-$74,999' ones.
Finally
Add a comma
Finally,
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the
Correct article usage
apply
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households
 with
the
Correct article usage
an
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income
 between $75,000 and $99,999
has
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have
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 the minimum amount.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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