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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph shows the
numbers
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number
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 of
visitors
 to the Caribbean
island
 from 2010 to 2017. All and all,the total number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean
island
 has been increasing throughout the period between 2010 and 2017. In
details
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detail
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, the
numbers
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number
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 of
visitors
 who stay on
island
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the island
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 is higher than the
numbers
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number
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 of
visitors
 who stay on
cruise
ships
 in previous years. Beginning in 2010, the
numbers
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number
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 of total
visitors
 continued to grow until 2017.And the number of people who chose to stay on the
cruise
ships
 is lower than the number of people who chose to stay on
island
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the island
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 until the middle of 2015.
Then
 in the middle of 2015,two lines
wore
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were
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 crossed,
it
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which
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 means that from
then
 on there were more
visitors
stay
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staying
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 on the
cruise
ships
 than
that
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apply
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on the
island
. The line of the
numbers
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number
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 of
visitors
 who stay on
cruise
ships
,
it
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apply
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began at 0.25
millions
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million
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 and
it
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apply
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fluctuated until 2012,
then
 continued to rise to 1.5
millions
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million
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 after 2012. And the other line of the
numbers
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number
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 of people
chose
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who chose
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 to stay on
island
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the island
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,
it
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apply
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start
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started
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 at 0.75
millions
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million
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, and
rising
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rose
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 to 1.5
millions
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million
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by
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in
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 2013, it stayed the same
in
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from
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 2013 to 2015.It fell in 2016 and recovered to 1.5 million by 2016 In summary, the total
visitors
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number of visitors
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 increased by 45
millions
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million
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 over the 8 years period.
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Linking words: Add some linking words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words numbers, visitors, island, cruise, ships, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 9 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 8 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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