The charts give information about employment in the UK in 1998 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. IELTS Bar Chart

The charts give information about employment in the UK in 1998 and 2012.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

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The pie chart illustrates the changes
about
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in
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employment
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in the UK
in
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between
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1988 and 2012. As can be seen from the pie chart, the most significant feature is the increase in the percentage of
male
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the male
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workforce
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, only minimal changes can be seen over the period of 14 years , from 53% full
time
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and 6%
part
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part-time
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time
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work force
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workforce
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in 1998 to 47% full
time
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and 7% in 2012. More than half of the
employment
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workforce
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belongs to the
full
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full-time
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time
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male sector, with 53% in 1988 and
this
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proportion remained the largest
although
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there was a marginal decline
with
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6% in 2012. In the same period , the percentage of female
full
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full-time
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time
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workforce
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was about 22% in 1988 which
than
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declined to 20%.
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, the figure for
part
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part-time
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time
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female
employee
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employees
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increased from 19% in 1988 to 26%
2012
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in 2012
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. In conclusion, it is quite evident that the male
full
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full-time
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time
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and
part
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part-time
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time
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workforce
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comprises more than half of the
employment
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workfoce
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workforce
despite the marginal variations.
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,
although
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female
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the female
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full
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full-time
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time
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work force
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workforce
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illustrates
the
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an
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upward trend
but
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it just comprises
the
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a
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quarter of the
employment
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workforce
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
Vocabulary: Replace the words employment, workforce, time with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "marginal" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • employment
  • sectors
  • workforce
  • fluctuations
  • significant change
  • stability
  • percentage
  • growth
  • decline
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • overtook
  • remained stable
  • data
  • analysis
  • overtake
  • comparative
  • comprehensive
  • substantial
  • marginal
  • chart
  • interpretation
  • industries
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