The graph shows the changing patterns of access to modern technology in homes in the UK (expressed in percentage terms).

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The line graph compares the fluctuations (measured in percentage) in
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the accessibility
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of digital devices at home in the UK in four different periods of time.
Overall
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, three technological sources were considered including CD player, mobile phone, and computer. Even though the use of the internet was not available at the start of the period, it became reachable during the years.
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, it was quite unusual to
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mobile phones
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1996 to 1997, at just under 20%, consistently growing to around 45%
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1998 to 1999 and keeping almost stable
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until
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2000 to 2003, at about 70%, followed by CD player which had the highest figure of
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slightly
above 90
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of the period.
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, CD players were the most accessible at the beginning, at 60%,
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computers had a number
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approximately 27%, gradually reaching just above 50
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2002 to 2003.
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,
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the
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had occurred by 1998, representing 10%, and it grew dramatically to about 45% in 2002.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • technological advancements
  • digital divide
  • accessibility
  • ubiquitous computing
  • smart home devices
  • telecommunication
  • multi-purpose gadgets
  • innovation
  • connectivity
  • obsolete
  • trend analysis
  • consumer electronics
  • statistical data
  • percentile growth
  • demographics
  • chart interpretation
  • gadgets
  • integration
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