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The graph below shows relative price changes for fresh fruits and vegetables, sugars and sweets, and carbonated drinks between 1978 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows relative price changes for fresh fruits and vegetables, sugars and sweets, and carbonated drinks between 1978 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the tariff changes for several types of food
along with
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 the
consumer
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 price
index
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 from 1978 to 2009.
Overall
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, the prices of sugar-contained foods and carbonated drinks remained below the
consumer
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index
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, which contradicts the huge discrepancy in fresh fruits and
vegetables’
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vegetables
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 prices throughout the given period. In the beginning, the fees for the foods and
consumer
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index
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 were relatively similar, at more than 50
million
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 US
dollars
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.
Subsequently
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, the price trends for sugar and sweets, carbonated drinks, and the
consumer
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index
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 grew steadily,
which
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apply
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surpassing 100
million
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dollars
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 in 1987.
Then
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, the tariff escalated until it showed a significant gap between the three of them of approximately 50
million
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dollars
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at the end
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 of the period.
On the other hand
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, the prices of fresh fruits and vegetables have dramatically increased since 1987, with several fluctuations, from over 100
million
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dollars
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 to eventually triple in 2009 to above 300
million
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dollars
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.

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