The graph shows the changing patterns of access to modern technology in homes in the UK (expressed in percentage terms).
The picture denotes the changing patterns of
access
in house
in the UK (expressed in Add a hyphen
in-house
percentage
terms) to modern technology. Overall
, access
of
CD Change preposition
to
player
, mobile Fix the agreement mistake
players
phone
and home Fix the agreement mistake
phones
computer
Fix the agreement mistake
computers
was
commenced in 1996. Unnecessary verb
apply
While
,
Remove the comma
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
internet
access
was embarked in
1998.
In 1996, Change preposition
on in
CD
player had Add an article
the CD
the
Correct article usage
a
percentage
of 60%, and it climbed in 2000 becoming around 80%, and in 2002, it has
experienced Unnecessary verb
apply
Correct article usage
a slightly
slightly increasing
Replace the word
slight increase
until
over 80%. Change preposition
to
Home
computer Add an article
The home
has
increased stability from 1996 to 2002, Unnecessary verb
apply
begun
from approximately 30% Wrong verb form
beginning
until
about 50%, and mobile phone was initiated with Change preposition
to
the
value under 20 Correct article usage
a
per
cent, and it surged around 25% in 1998, and in the Change preposition
apply
last
period, this
has risen achieving
about 70%.
Change the verb form
to achieve
Whereas
, internet
access
was
started in 1998 Unnecessary verb
apply
with
Change preposition
at
the
Correct article usage
a
percentage
of 10%, and it increased in 2000 with
approximately 30%, and Change preposition
by
the
end of Change preposition
by the
period
, Add an article
the period
the
Correct article usage
apply
internet
access
has
grown until reaching Wrong verb form
had
the
value above 40%. Correct article usage
a
Additionally
, the last
period namely 2002 that had the highest percentage
was CD player, and the lowest was internet
access
.Submitted by fifi on
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