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The diagram represents the several stages of Brick manufacturing from clay for the building industry.

The diagram represents the several stages of Brick manufacturing from clay for the building industry.
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The given diagram provides the different stages of production of cement
blocks
 for
industry
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the industry
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 of buildings.
Overall
, brick manufacture
envolves
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involves
 seven stages,
emerge
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emerges
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 from digging,
pass
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 through a number of phases before going to the shops by delivery. As is given in the graph, the creation of
blocks
 begins
from
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with
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 digging the clay with
large
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a large
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 digger. The clay is
than
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then
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 filtered and processed in
roller
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a roller
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 machine to escape from
metal
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the metal
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 grid and
then
 mixed with sand and water. After that point, the mixture
kept
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is kept
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 in a mould or in a wire cutter to create the raw shape of
blocks
. Afterwards, the shaped raw cement
blocks
 dried in the oven for 24-48 hours, before putting them into the kiln. In
this
 stage, dried bricks
kept
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are kept
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in
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at
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 moderate and high
temperature
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temperatures
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, between 200-1300
centigrate
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centigrade
 and
then
 placed in
cooling
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the cooling
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 chamber for 48-72 hours.
Next
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The next
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 stage of constructing
a
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apply
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cinder
blocks
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block
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 includes packaging and in the final stage cubes
delivered
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are delivered
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 to building construction.
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