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The bar chart below shows the percentage growth in average property prices in three different countries between 2007 and 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage growth in average property prices in three different countries between 2007 and 2010.
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The bar chart provides information about
growing
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the growing
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 proportion
in
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of
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 property costs of the three countries over the
period
 from 2007 to 2010.
Overall
it is clear that
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Algeria had the highest ratio of growth
prices
 at the beginning of the
period
,
whereas
the
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China was the least growing in property
prices
 of the three but it reached
to
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the top
at the end
.
However
, it is shown that
the
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Argentina
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Argentina's
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 growth fluctuated over a
period
 of 4 years. To start,
2007
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in 2007
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, the growth percentage of
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Algeria stood at about 6.5%.
However
, over the
period
 of two years, it experienced a
drastically
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 drop to around 3.2%.
At the end
 of the
period
,
the
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Algeria
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Algeria's
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growing
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growth
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 rate marginally decreased to below 3.0% in 2010. Turning to
the
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China and
the
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Argentina
relatively
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are relatively
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 similar that started at 2.0% and 3.1%, respectively.
After
this
, the
prices
 rate of
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China dramatically grew to 4.2% and
also
 the
Argentina
 was almost 5.0% in 2008. From 2009 to 2010, the former experienced
increase
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an increase
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 gradually over 2 years to the highest point at over 6.0%, whilst the latter
significatly
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significantly
 dropped to 1.2% and
then
 rose marginally to 2.2%
that
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the
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Argentina
 had the lowest improving rate in property
prices
 of all three countries
at the end
 of the
period
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, prices, argentina with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "marginally" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage growth
  • average property prices
  • economic conditions
  • real estate market
  • year-to-year growth rate
  • government policies
  • international events
  • growth trend
  • investment attractiveness
  • socioeconomic status
  • forecasting
  • infrastructure projects
  • real estate laws
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